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The line graph provides information about motor vehicle stealing in four different countries from 1990 to 1999.The figures mentioned are in (of) theft per thousands vehicles ( thefts per thousand vehicles).
Great Britain had the highest vehicle stealing throughout the years while Sweden showed an increasing trend. However, France and Canada stood lower with slight fluctuations
In France and Canada, nearly 8000 (8) cars were stolen in the year 1990 which was twice (half than that of )lower than Great Britain. Following that, both countries had a slight fall in thefts for the next three years until 1993. Meanwhile, a sharp decline (in thefts) can (could )be observed in Great Britain as well in the same year. After that, car robbery in Canada almost levelled off till 1999.France also reached to the same number at around 5000 (5)after a slight rise over five years .A significant number of thefts was(were) reported in Great Britain in 1990 which was more than double of the other three countries. Starting from the lowest figure, (thefts in) Sweden outraced France and Canada in an upward direction and reached approximately 15000 (15) in 1999,which was two times higher than France and Canada. With the exception of a steady decline and rise in 1993 and 1996 respectively, Great Britain experienced a steady drop in the number until 1999 which was roughly similar to the initial period.
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A good attempt! However the data interpreted is incorrect. Numbers are per thousand not in thousands so the figures stated in the response are all incorrect. In the 2nd paragraph it should be half and not twice which has made the response incomprehensible. A decline will be in thefts and not the country as written in the 3rd paragraph. Some Grammar errors can be seen in the response which have been emboldened above.
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