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* ‘to be a part of’
* Please look up sentences with ‘so that’ . Here, ‘leisure time so that, they can enhance their skills’ the comma after so that was not needed.
* ‘make them to improve their creativity’ (‘make them improve’ [we don’t use ‘to’ with ‘make + + noun/pronoun + verb ] ‘help them improve’ would have been better here )
* ‘children spending their time alone will become introvert’ (introverts)
* ‘They tries to’ (They try to)This was one of your best essays in comparison. It had fewer errors and many well-written sentences. However, there are still quite a few noticeable errors.
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