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  • Shahbaz

    October 30, 2021 at 1:38 PM
    50 Network Points
    Activity Points 7690

    * Make sure to pay attention to logical sequencing of ideas. This essay didn’t have any real problems. However, you must remember to introduce a point first and to give explanations and examples after it. Being able to present a well-developed argument in this way is important for both ‘Task Achievement’ and ‘Coherence and Cohesion’. Trying to include too many ideas in the same paragraph or using a complex idea with many sub-parts can cause problems here.

    * ‘often discouraged to pursue it.’ (‘discouraged from pursuing it’ is better)

    * The conclusion should be a paraphrased restatement of the main ideas.
    * There is a lot of topic-specific vocabulary used with precision. At the same time, some word choices sound a bit unusual.


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