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* I don’t feel sure about the use of ‘augmented’ in BP1. Please review its use and confirm whether it can be used in the context you intended. It cannot be used interchangeably with ‘an increase in the number of’
* ‘graph of road accidents also boomed’ ( this is an unusual way of expressing that idea)
* ‘People usually violate traffic rules, and due to that innocent people lost their lives’ ( innocent people lose their lives…)
* The question asks why people feel less safe even though there is less crime. Although I can clearly understand your argument, I feel like the essay could have addressed this question in a better way.
Score: 4.5/6
