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* This essay is 377 words long. The minimum word limit is 250. There is no upper word limit and a long essay, in itself, won’t hurt your score. However, a longer essay might leave us with less time to proofread what we have written. Likewise, a longer essay might include ideas that are not relevant or ‘focused’.
* While answering a two part question, we use the first body paragraph to answer the first question and the second one to address the second question. I felt that the second body paragraph’s focus was not as clear as the first one’s. The second question was ‘Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?’ The point about the absence of toilets and women coaches was still answering the first question ‘what are the reasons?’. The second paragraph should be discussing the positive or negative aspects of the situation.
* ‘In conclusion, it must be said that participation of women in sports should be given as much prominence as men.’ Please check out the conclusions in the sample essays. The main purpose of the conclusion is to restate the main points. We can include a recommendation, but after restating the main points in a condensed form.
Score : 5/6
