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The given line graph illustrates the robberies per thousand vehicles in Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada from 1990 to 1999.Overall,it can be clearly seen that Great Britain had highest number of vehicle thefts throughout the ten year period.
In early 1990 ( 1990s) France and Canada had almost equal number of recorded vehicle robberies of about 6 and 7 per thousand respectively. After that there was a continuous rise in the vehicle thefts in France till mid 1991 when it reached a number of around 9 per thousand which was eqal (spelling) to that of Sweden at that time. Thereafter the number remained greater than Canada till the end where they both finished at around 6 per thousand.
In Sweden besides a slight decline till mid 1991 and levelling off from 1996 to 1998 there was a constant increase in the count of thefts till it reached a number of about 14 per thousand at the end of period.
In Great Britain the figure of recorded vehicle robberies was by far the highest among the four countries. This count was around 18 and 17 per thousand at the beginning (spelling) and end of the period respectively.
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