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* ‘ regarding the new project, that is proposed by‘ (I am not sure why there had to be a comma after ‘project’. Please look up ‘when to use commas with relative clauses’)
* ‘One of my friend‘ (‘One of my’ and ‘one of the’ are always followed by plural nouns. It should be ‘one of my friends’)
- ”Having known about your project , I am feeling very glad and hoping that, as this project is scheduled near by our neighboring land, and will bring many more development here”
The clause structure of this sentence is very unusual. Please re-read it see if it needs to be rewritten.
- “children are often stay at home’
‘children often stay at home’
- If require , our housing society is also ready to to contribute
I think you meant to say ‘if required‘
Score: 2/3
