AdministratorDecember 14, 2021 at 11:22 AM
students who were (are) appreciated
it motivated (motivates) them
moreover, teachers have the responsibility to explore the hidden talent of pupils ( found irrelevant or not have presently clearly in the context of topic sentence.
The fear of getting punished would force them to be depressed and shy ( I believe the context is not accurate as per the argument)
he feel (feels) more stressed.
Not convinced with the conclusion (incomplete usage of “though”)
Feedback : Use tense carefully . Subject-verb agreement is another factor that requires precision. Use essay structure as discussed in class.