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In this essay we will compare the for the years 1995 to 2011- Task-1 is not an essay
(Overall,) The biggest percentage of money spent on food is evident from the entire data. Medicine, on the other hand, receives a smaller share of the budget.- Overall is important to mention in the overview
Clothing and on the other hand (on the other hand, clothing)
had a percentage of 1995, with 19% and 18%, respectively in 2011 so they was not a huge change. (had percentage of 19% and 18% in 1995 and 2011 respectively).
so they was not a huge change. (it experienced a marginal change)
spending on it by (from) 9% in 1995 to 2% in 2021.
Feedback : Follow the Task-1 structure , as discussed in class. Sentence structure needs to be improved. Make use of cohesive devices and prepositions should be use carefully.
Band: 1.5/3
