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Customers are more inclined to do business with employees who wear the companies’ uniform (paraphrasing has not been done right)
On the other hand,(moreover,) uniform provides recognition to particular brand by promoting it.
Moreover,uniform creates an environment of hardwork , on the other hand,uniform becomes an obstacle in the growth of the company as well as the employees. (didn’t get the purpose of the sentence as statement seems to contradict itself)
Employees fell (feel) lethargic as
Feedback : Essay is not following the structure as discussed in the class , two body paragraphs are required (advantages and disadvantages) , rather than constructing 3-4 shorter ones.
