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660 Network Points
Activity Points 26560
Introduction is incomplete, not stating the solutions.
if everyone in the family uses their private transport to commute (,) (it will result in road jam) as a result it enlarges the road jam.
B.P 1, is mentioning solutions, stick to pattern as discussed in class . Single idea per paragraph
If over bridge (is) available
More bicycles path can help to less logjam although (moreover,) it is reduces the air pollution as well. –
no other vehicle are (is) allowed on that lane
conclusion is again focusing the solution, “causes” part has not been discussed. Hence, not summarizing the paragraph completely
Band: 3/6