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Most people think governments could be held accountable for safeguarding environment. (while some argue) some people argue that every individual should be liable for it.
While governments can encourage factories to shift to countryside. (,) I believe that people should limit themselves from fossil fuel driven vehicles.
In my opinion, this is a sensitive issue (as it is deteriorating every day.) which should (and needs to ) be dealt by both individuals and governments (collectively) (as it is deteriorating every day.- remove it)
It is (the) authorities (which) should make legislation to mitigate
each person plays (an) important role on (in protecting the) environment
humans are heavily (have) reliance on fossil fuel energy
Try to avoid making short sentences
Band: 3.5/6