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foreign food chains and this trend is increasing among people (incomplete sentence)
various food items smoothly (smooth)
trade among countries (has) increased greatly.
To begin with, (not suitable as per the context, though in B.P 1, it could work)
Secondly, people (now) can experience variety
sentence structure ” due to” has been used repeatedly. Hence, essay has monotonous structure
Introduction and conclusion are well -written , there is clear overall progression. Task achievement is there. Work on structure. Be careful in opting the “cohesive devices” ; otherwise it would come under faulty and mechanical usage
Keep writing!!
Band: 3.5/6