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The natural landscape is allowed the …( Access to natural landscape …)
benifits (benefits)
problem might they is destruction of natural resources ( problem they might face) ; people are not going to face depletion rather these places will get destroy in terms of their resources.
organism(s) of bio diversity
The endangered animals would be happening ( certain species will become endangered)
I would suggest to highlight the opinion in one of the body paragraphs too.
Work on sentence formation as mostly there is confusion in subject and object , hence the usage of verb is also inappropriate.
Band: 2.5/6