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Overall (,) there are significant changes
the farmland and the forest park has been replaced by some buildings (golf course) and the tennis court
. Although (moreover,) the fishing port has been removed
Therefore in the south west direction car park has been added which is close to the hotel (therefore is not suitable)
Though (through) all these years
Feedback : Faulty usage of cohesive devices has been observed at many places. I would advise to understand their right usage.
Band: 1.5/3
