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Introduction lacks any information about solution
There are a lot of reasons behind this problem of leaving the country. One of the main reasons is the high pay rates. – question doesn’t demand causes.
Try to avoid the use of “we” , almost whole second B.P follows the same structure.
repetitive usage of words has been observed.
Paragraphing has not been done well. Introduce an idea , discuss it and compile it.
Lack of sentence structure variety and cohesive devices
Band: 2/6
