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There is an increase in the migration of working professionals from their poor countries to rich countries. This essay discusses (as a result, there are) the problems such as the shortage of skilled professionals, along with that it has an adverse impact on the country’s economy. (, but) These problems can be averted by taking proper measures to generate employment opportunities and by enacting strict migration policies. – combining the sentences with appropriate conjunctions , and avoid the usage of memorized sentences like “this essay discusses”
The addition of dependent clauses, conditional sentences, combination of compound and complex sentences would embellish the writing even better. Rest is fine.
