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repetitive usage of words ( environment
govt. (government) – avoid contractions and short forms
But (I believe) every citizen is responsible – Thesis statement needs to be more assertive
Lack of cohesive devices
some of them has (have) no
. To solve this issue govt. has so spread awareness (This sentence is body paragraph 2 is creating doubts on cohesion, may be it requires further explanation)
netizens (not an appropriate word as per the context) rather use residents, inhabitants
Need to work on vocabulary and sentence structure.
Keep writing!!
Band: 2.5/6