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The introduction does not contain your opinion. Even the last sentence of your introduction is grammatically incorrect. You missed out a few helping verbs and also the usage of word lenient is wrong.
youth have either resorted to immigration or they are languishing in jobless situation.
Rest of the writing is fine in terms of grammatical accuracy.
Good use of vocabulary and grammatical range is also satisfactory.
Band Score weightage: 4.5/6.0