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* ‘how the advantages of this trend surpasses’ ( ‘surpass’ plural verb since its subject ‘advantages’ is plural)
* ‘a famous brand endorses’ (Unless you are speaking about one particular brand, it would be better to use ‘famous brands’)
* The second body paragraph has a clear focus and presents a relevant idea. The first paragraph was a bit vague. I assume that it was talking about advantages. However, it does not clearly elaborate how those things are advantages. Please ask me to elaborate this in the class if this is not clear to you.
Score : 4.5/6
