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  • Falak

    Administrator
    November 10, 2021 at 10:58 AM
    280 Network Points
    Activity Points 6270

    Feedback : Make use of transition words to establish logical sequence throughout the paragraph.

    Try to use punctuations for better understanding

    Topic sentences of each body paragraph could have been more effective

    other people say that it is responsible for individuals as well (individuals are responsible as well)

    Band : 2.5/6

    Keep practicing!!

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