AdministratorNovember 10, 2021 at 10:58 AM280 Network PointsActivity Points 6270
Feedback : Make use of transition words to establish logical sequence throughout the paragraph.
Try to use punctuations for better understanding
Topic sentences of each body paragraph could have been more effective
other people say that it is responsible for individuals as well (individuals are responsible as well)
Band : 2.5/6