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* (its vs it’s ) <– look this up. You used ‘it’s’ in two places where it should have been ‘its’. This would increase the total number of errors.
* A few problems with articles. ‘in lifestyle of citizens’ (in the lifestyle/lifestyles of )
* ‘ the world tourism’ <– we don’t need ‘the’ here.
* ‘drawbacks …. outweights’ (it should be ‘outweigh’ since ‘drawbacks’ is plural)
* Make sure you write the letters i,e,t etc. clearly.
* ‘detrimental’ was misspelled
* Usually, we say ‘advantages/disadvantages of something’ and not ‘ disadvantages for’* ‘homogeneity among different cultures discourages ‘ Since we are discussing this issue in a ‘theoretical’ way, this sentence would look better with ‘would’ —> ‘homogeneity among different cultures would discourage’
* ‘result in forgetting their ‘ (I believe it should be ‘result in them forgetting their’, but I need to think about it a bit more.
4.75/6
