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overall character improve(s)
children’s overall character improve when there is a shift in the mode of teaching to include prizes rather than penalizing alone. (couldn’t find the justification over this “alone” usage)
teachers correct them giving remunerations (remunerations would not be an appropriate word here)
Need to work on essay structure as here, B.P 1 is saying if we follow “X” it will be useful and B.P 2 is saying if we do not follow “X” it will be harmful . (This structure is not recommended )
Examples need to be more specific and it is advisable to include examples in both the paragraphs .
Band : 2/6
