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eligibility criteria is also increasing (becoming stringent)
theoritical (theoretical)
(in fact) the person can (himself) help his family financially
businessmans (businessmen)
Opinion should be stated in conclusion not the vice-versa, it is always a good idea to reflect your opinion in introduction as will add more coherence and more sync to writing. There is definitely room for improvement in lexical resources.
Band: 3/6
