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Traffic jams mostly occur during (on) major roads or right near big malls, theatres, bus stands and railway stations
Introduction needs to talk about causes and solution to tackle this problem rather than just exaggerating the issue.
Paragraphing has been done inappropriately throughout, B.P 1 is mentioning problem X, and the solution offered is to problem Y.
B.P 1 and B.P 2 should be dedicated to causes and solution respectively.
Band: 2.5/6
