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Even though it has some positives, despite some advantages – (These statements talks about certain benefits, since you are mentioning them , try to show something relevant to these points in any of the body paragraphs too, your statements will be more justified then)
Coherence and cohesion is maintained. There has been use of different variety of sentence structures as well .
Though there is definitely some room for improvement in lexical resources.
Keep writing!!
Band: 4/6
