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minor errors noted: plays/builds/nowadays/these resources
spelling error: economic growth/recruit/foreign/creates/benefit
use capitalization for places
avoid giving a comma before ‘but’
avoid using a personal pronoun in body paragraph.
use connectors to begin body paragraph 2 [on the contrary/on one hand/moreover]
add connectors like -to conclude at the end
note: add more constructive sentences/work on spelling errors and focus on adding connecting terms
