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Dear Sir/Madam ( Put a comma after Dear Sir/ Madam, )
I am writing this letter to inform you that I have recently lost my digital camera while I was on holiday in Goa, India. I am writing to claim the insurance coverage for the lost item.
It was a brand new black Nikon D500 digital camera and <s>was gifted my father</s> ( was gifted by my father)on my recent birthday. It has resolution of 22 megapixels, 3.4 inches LCD touch screen monitor, a 70-millimetre lens, and was in black leather case. I <s>have</s>( had ) purchased <s>it</s>( a similar one) one year back and it cost me <s>70000 Rs</s> ( 70,000 rupees).
I am sure that I lost the camera while I <s>have</s> (was having ) dinner outdoor with my family at a sea beach near Bagha beach in south Goa. The name of the restaurant was “Blue fox Restaurant” and once I noticed that the camera was missing, I immediately <s>informed to</s> ( informed the)restaurant manager and later on to the local police station. Unfortunately, no one could find the camera.
As per the terms of insurance cover, I am entitled to be reimbursed for any lost item on the vacation. I am enclosing the claim form with this letter. Please reimburse the amount to my account number stated in the form.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully ( Put a comma after ‘yours faithfully’
Raj Arakala.
Feedback:
The introduction to the letter is appropriate and the purpose of the letter is clear. Fully addresses all parts of the task. Paragraphing is skilfully managed. Ideas are arranged in a logical order. The points are not always linked together well and punctuation is sometimes faulty. The sentences are kept quite simple and mistakes occur as soon as more complex structures are attempted. The lexical resource could have been improved.
You will further improve with practice.
Band Score : 2/3
