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Body Paragraph 1 : To elaborate (more), more is redundant here.
Climate can be drastically impacted if there will be a flood (Agricultural sector can be impacted adversely with intensive climatic changes)
poor harvesting makes farmers (peasantry) more ( comparative form of poor is poorer ; not more poorer) poorer (helpless) and less demand in products (great loss in crop yields)
In short (apparently) , such things is (are) not under control
Body paragraph 2 : Not convinced with content related to MNC
Conclusion : Try to state the argument completely , followed by your opinion
Feedback : Need to work on sentence structure.
band : 3/6
