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The line graph illustrates the number of car robberies per thousand vehicles that took place in Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada over a period of ten years from 1990. Overall , Great Britain appears to have witnessed the largest number of thefts throughout the given period.
France and Canada which began from figures of approximately 8 and 7 per thousand respectively declined to a final figure of around 5 per 1000 in 1999 with minor fluctuations over the period. At the same time, the number of car robberies in Great Britain grew up from about 17per 1000 to the peak value of approximately 20per 1000 in 1996 except for a brief fall during 1992-1993.This was followed by a decline of about 3per 1000 vehicles by 1999.
In contrast to this , Sweden, which started off from the lowest figure of just above five in 1990 showed an increasing trend to reach at the final rate of nearly 14 per thousand vehicles after going through slight variations and surpassing France and Canada in mid-1990 and 1991 respectively.
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