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* ‘famous’ is not a suitable word choice here.
* Please review the use of the past tense in the first sentence of the first body paragraph. Since it’s a general trend and not something that happened only in the past , I would use ‘opt’ rather than ‘opted’.* ‘it will lead to change their thoughts’ (lead to a change…)
* The sentence that starts with ‘These kinds of benefits to turning away from tertiary education’ is a bit confusing.
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