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The number of workers is counted in thousands and the units are measured in million tonnes. (units have already mentioned)- Try to keep introduction concise.
(Overall,) Throughout the year, steel production in the UK was higher than actual demand, with the exception of December. Workers’ data, on the other hand, had drastically decreased by the end of the year.- it is important to mention “overall” in overview
Answer has been presented category wise , though I would appreciate more grouping and comparison of data (as question demands)
whereas the number of steel businesses (number of workers)
Keep writing!!
Band: 1.5/3
