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ACADEMIC TASK 1: MAP
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Note: I have attached the picture of the map in the document.
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The two maps present the changes of the road to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the principal change to the road was construction of the different car parkings and round abouts.
Looking at the map, we can see that in 2007, bus stop was on east to the city hospital. Moreover, the car parking was on east to the road and it was same for both staff and public.
On the other hand by 2010, the construction of two round about taken place on the hospital road. As moving further, the car parking for public was on the east to the hospital and for staff was it was on east side of hospital road. Bus station was moved to the west side of staff parking.
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Introduction: paraphrase the question statement
we can see- do not use I or we as its a formal task
Overall- add more key features
by 2010- in 2010
As moving further- Start your sentence from the car parking
staff was it- staff it was
The word limit should be 150+. Add more details
BAND SCORE: 1.5/3 Keep writing!
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Total words 165
time took 23 minutes@anureetsekhon
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The two maps depicts ( depict)
that serviced ( served)
comparison of details needs to be more effective
Band : 2/3
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The map shows how the road access to a city hospital has developed in 3 years from 2007 to 2010. There have been several changes, the most noticeable being the progression of two roundabouts at both ends of the hospital road, elimination of bus stops, and adding a bus station, and separation of the car parking area.
In 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by a ring road that connects the hospital road at the southern end of the city hospital. On both sides of the hospital road, there were six bus stops in total, three stoppages on each side, and a common car park for staff and the public on the east. The car park has the entrance from the ring road. Finally, the hospital road joins the city road at the farthest south of the map.
Turning to the 2010 map, it can be seen that two roundabouts have been made at both ends of the hospital road to improve traffic control. On its east, the car park remained the same, albeit it has been separated for staff only and a new car park has been constructed beside the ring road in the east. All the bus stops along the hospital roadside have gone and a new bus station can be seen on the west.
Word count: 217
I request @vimigupta ma’am to evaluate the above answer.
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The map shows ( maps show) how the road access to a city hospital has developed in 3 years from 2007 to 2010. There have been several changes, the most noticeable being the progression (construction) of two roundabouts at both ends of the hospital road, elimination of bus stops, and adding a bus station, ( addition of a bus stop) and separation of the car parking area.
In 2007, the city hospital was surrounded by a ring road that connects (connected with ) the hospital road at the southern end of the city hospital. On both sides of the hospital road, there were six bus stops in total, three stoppages on each side, and a common car park for staff and the public on (in) the east. The car park has (had) the entrance from the ring road. Finally, the hospital road joins (joined) the city road at the farthest south of the map.
Turning to the 2010 map, it can be seen that two roundabouts have been made at both ends of the hospital road to improve traffic control. On its east, the car park remained the same, albeit it has been separated for staff only and a new car park has been constructed beside the ring road in the east. All the bus stops along the hospital roadside have gone and a new bus station can be seen on (in) the west.Word count: 217
Feedback:
The response has a clear overall progression and organization as it is introduced, the main features are identified, then it clearly compares the first map with the second. There is a mix of vocabulary, with the right language of location used to say where things were positioned and the language of comparison and contrast used to good effect to show how things differed or remained the same. It does not score well in GRA as there are several tense and conjunction errors in the answer which limits the score.
Band Score : 1.5/3
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The given maps illustrate how the road leading to a city hospital in 2007 has developed over the next 3 years.
Overall, there are considerable differences between the two after the developments which occurred in 3 years including the newly constructed roundabouts.
Firstly, the access to city hospital changed from direct entrance from the city road to a roundabout, which also led way to the bus station which replaced the previous bus sops to the west of hospital road. Afterwards, at the junction of hospital and the ring road, the 2nd roundabout was built in 2010, giving another access to bus station. However, the ring road surrounding the city hospital remains same except that, a roundabout was constructed and also two entrances were given to two different car parks.
Furthermore, the pre-existing car park to the east of hospital road in 2007, got modified to staff car park in 2010, replacing the old bus stops to the east of hospital road. Another car park was newly constructed in 2010 to the east of hospital with access to the ring road. It is designated for the public usage.
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Proof-read the piece of writing to avoid verbosity.
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Band: 2.5/3
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The given map illustrate development around hospital leading to city hospital in year 2007 and 2010.
Overall, the major developments were the construction of two roundabouts on the hospital road, replacement of bus station from bus stops and separate car parking for public and hospital staff.
In 2010, the development of roundabout at the intersection of city road and hospital road provide the access to the newly constructed bus station, which had replaced all the bus stations on hospital road. On the east of city hospital, a separate car parking has been developed to accommodate the growing demand of public parking and old parking on east of hospital road made exclusively available for hospital staff only.
The other roundabout was constructed at the crossing of the hospital to the ring road, provide second entrance to the bus station. Finally, ring road around the city hospital remained unchanged, except a new road developed giving access to public car parking on east side of the city hospital.
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The map shows the development in the route to the city hospital in the year 2007 and in the 2010 respectively.
Overall, significant conversion has taken place from bus stops to bus stations and formation of roundabouts in two major intersections from the year 2007- 2010.
Firstly, in 2007, City hospital can be reached by taking right of the City road crossing several bus stops. However in 2010, there were efficient changes made to the Hospital road. Two roundabouts were found at the intersections of the main roads precisely City road, hospital road and Ring road.
In addition to this, A bus station was found at the west of Hospital road in 2010. Followed by this, Parking for staff and Public has been split as compared to 2007 , where both the Parking was at the same space.
In 2010, Staff car parking has been seen to the east of Hospital road while Public parking at the east of City Road. Lastly, A round about was noticed at the place where city road and Ring road intersects where taking right leads to the City hospital in the year 2010.
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the above map showcases the road access to the city hospital between the years 2007 and 2010
Overall, the entrance to the city hospital was renovated with a roundabout and newly constructed public car parking added to the east of the hospital and an added bus station facility was provided near the hospital in the year 2010
In 2007 the hospital was connected with a city road and to the southeast, there was a car parking facility for both public and staff who visit the hospital and a ring road towards the north and there were several bus stops parallel either side of the hospital road.
in 2010 there were significant developments made to the city hospital the common car parking was now converted into two separate parking, that is for staff parking beside the hospital road and the public parking beside the city hospital towards the east and going down the hospital, towards the west, there is a new bus terminal added to the hospital road which connects two roundabouts which come from city road and the other from hospital road and the ring road stands at the same place towards the north of the city hospital.
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The map describes the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and the present. Overall, the village has witnessed changes like residential areas, hotels, and a tennis court.
In the year 1995, towards the northern part, the land is covered with farmlands and forest areas, the village had a road that divides the west side which is reserved for housing, to the east side which is the green land. The same road connects to the southern of the village which has all the shops, fish markets, cafés, and hotels that are built parallel to the south road.
At present, the village has experienced major changes like the number of houses has increased, the forest park has been converted into a tennis court and golf area, and in the southern part, we see the shops, fish markets, and fishing port have been eliminated and the area is now occupied by restaurants and apartments. The hotel has its own car parking built adjacent to it, while we see no changes in the cafeteria zone. It is observed a significant transformation in the village since 1995.
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The map illustrates different changes that have taken place on road leading towards city hospital from 2007 to 2010.
Overall, the roads have witnessed great deal of changes between 2007 and 2010. The principal changes have been the addition of roundabout, public car parking and bus station.
Firstly, the bus stops which were present on the both sides of the hospital road in 2007 have been removed and a bust station has been constructed on the western side of the hospital road in 2007. Secondly, public and staff car parking which was located at eastern side of the hospital road has been restricted for only staff members. While a separate car parking for public has been constructed in the north eastern region, on the left side of the city hospital and it has an access from ring road.
Furthermore, In 2010, two roundabout have been built, first one at an intersection of city road and hospital road and second one in the front of city hospital where ring road was meeting hospital road. Moreover, newly constructed bus station has an access from both roundabouts.
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