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opening statement: with regards to- in response to the advertisement posted for the requirement..

BP 1: looked forward- not required

BP2: to the psychology: in understanding the mindset of kids

BP2: studying: be studying

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Dear Madam,

After having seen your advertisement in Citylight magazine of July edition, I am writing this letter to apply for the job of child care.

I belong to Melbourne city of Australia and my husband had to shift to India for one of the projects that will last for next six months. Since I am alone at home and have enough experience in taking care of children, I would like to give my name for the post of child-care.

I have done my training in the day-care course and was looking after 3 kids in Melbourne city in my previous job. I have got sufficient experience of handling kids and managing them while their parent’s absence. In addition to this, I am pretty hard working and sincere and adhere to the instructions given by the guardians. My experience will surely help me fulfilling my duty in a better manner.

I have great passion for baking cakes and cookies and in my spare time I love to follow my heart. Also I also love to shop and collect antique things for my home. I feel I can do this better being part of your family as child care worker.

In case of any query you can contact me on my mobile number that is 9876554322. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Jasmeet Kaur

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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement which I found in Times magazine regarding your requirement of a female nanny to take care of your six year old child for a period of 6 months.

I would like to apply for this position as I am in dire need of a job to pay for my tuition fees. Last month, I have passed out from high school and have been looking for a job since and your job description seemed a perfect fit for me as I am great with kids.

Also I already have some past experience of babysitting children and had gotten excellent recommendation from my previous employer.

I have always dreamt of visiting Australia and this job came as a golden opportunity for me as apart from my working hours it will provide me plenty of time to explore nearby tourist attractions in Australia.

I am really looking forward to hearing from you and would appreciate your consideration of me for this job. Also I have attached my previous employer’s recommendation along with this letter.

Yours sincerely,

Sumita

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OPENING STATEMENT: which I found in- posted in the Times magazine

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BP1: passionately want to explore child care practitioner opportunities overseas

BP2: qualities suitable for the post of nanny such as empathy, patience etc. Certification along with relevant experience and what you did in that role

BP3: state different ways of spending time in Australia: explore exotic locations, enroll in a course etc.

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Dear Sir or Madam,

Having seen your advertisement for someone to stay at your home for a duration of six months and play the role of a babysitter, I am writing to express my interest in the role.

I like looking after children as the guileless interactions I can have with them cheer me up. Moreover, as a person who is interested in exploring different parts of the world and it’s varied cultures, I find coming down to live in Australia as very appealing.

I have some previous experience as I took up part-time babysitting jobs while pursuing my masters in the USA and as a certified first aider, I would also be of help in handling any health emergencies.

Touring to see different cultural monuments and natural wonders is how I plan to spend any free time during my stay there. My resume is attached for your reference.

If you require any further information, feel free to contact me. I look forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,
Suraj Parsi

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OPENING STATEMENT: begin your letter with I am writing this letter in response to the advertisement posted on _ Magazine on _.

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Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement that got posted in one of the reputed Australian magazine regarding the post of a caretaker for your 6 year old kid.

I would like to take this opportunity as I have some couple of years of experience as a primary school teacher. I possess certain qualities such as patience, mingle up with small kids easily and also look after their school work as well which makes me eligible for this work.

Moreover, I am looking for a job with flexible working hours as I’m into a research activity relating to my post graduation course which needs a lot of time in preparing my journals etc. This job would help me out in the preparation work and also to pay my study related fees. At the same time I can utilize my free time in doing some jobs that help me to earn enough for my studies.

I would like to hear from you soon and hope will be given a chance to prove my skills as a care taker.

Thanks,

ABC

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Dear Sir or Madam,

This is regarding the advert in Sydney Life magazine regarding looking after your 6-year-old kid and staying with your family for a period of 6 months.

My name is Jane and I live in London working mainly as a nanny and partly as a home maid. I often feel that I am born to look after children as I simply love taking care of them. My tolerance level and endless patience in understanding different children, their needs, and their desire for attention are what I simply do the best. As a hobby, I take up painting and play the piano. During my time with your family, I could also teach your kid these hobbies with your consent. In my opinion, this would instill creativity and not cause wastage of their time on electronics such as Tv, mobile, video games, etc.

Moreover, I would be the right choice for your family as I have a lot of experience as a daycare practitioner and can provide you all my past references. I am also a good cook and you will love the traditional English recipes that I can prepare. I could also do the daily chores such as cleaning and washing and I promise you would not need anyone else for the job.

I have not been to Australia and I always heard wonderful things about this amazing country. During my leisure time, I would spend most of the time sightseeing the various landmarks and also trekking in the remote outbacks of Australia.

Please consider me as I am the right fit for your family and you will not regret this decision. Hoping to receive a favorable response from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Jane Adams