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IELTS Essay Writing ( Agree/ Disagree )
Many people believe that living a city life offers greater benefits as compared to the
countryside? To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words. You should spend 40 minutes on this task
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13 Replies
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Some people argue that the lifestyle offered by living in the cities is better than living in the countryside. I my opinion, I completely agree with them for many reasons that I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, urban areas have all the public facilities that serves their population efficiently. For example, high quality schools and hospitals can be easily accessed by the students and patients, respectively. Also, main airports and governmental institutions are located in these areas. Another point is that there are many job opportunities available in town since all the huge corporates have their main branches in such districts. For instance, the teachers, doctors and engineers can easily apply to multiple company at the same time to increase their chance of securing the job they need while staying at the same region and don’t have to leave their families for another sector.
On the other hand, rural areas don’t have a diverse number of institutions that provide public services to their society. To illustrate, while having the essential organizations present such as hospitals and schools, they don’t provide as many services as the ones in the municipalities. Moreover, because there are less companies in the landscape, there are fewer chances for job seekers to be enrolled at or to advance in their careers. An example for that is engineers, they can’t utilize as many resources in such places because either they are not available or not suitable for the farmlands.
In conclusion, living in a city provides many services and facilities for the people while enjoying an amazing lifestyle at a hectic pace.
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Some people argue that the lifestyle offered by living in the cities is better than living in the countryside. I my opinion, I completely agree with them for many reasons that I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, urban areas have all the public facilities that serves (no s) their population efficiently. For example, high quality schools and hospitals can be easily accessed by the students and patients, respectively. Also, main airports and governmental institutions are located in these areas. Another point is that there are many job opportunities available in town since all the huge corporates have their main branches in such districts. For instance, the teachers, doctors and engineers can easily apply to multiple company at the same time to increase their chance of securing the job they need while staying at the same region and don’t have to leave their families for another sector.
On the other hand, rural areas don’t have a diverse number of institutions that provide public services to their society. To illustrate, while having the essential organizations present such as hospitals and schools, they don’t provide as many services as the ones in the municipalities. Moreover, because there are less companies in the landscape, there are fewer chances for job seekers to be enrolled at or to advance in their careers. An example for that is engineers, they can’t utilize as many resources in such places because either they are not available or not suitable for the farmlands.
In conclusion, living in a city provides many services and facilities for the people while enjoying an amazing lifestyle at a hectic pace.
Feedback:
Grammatical accuracy is finally excellent except one mistake in the beginning. The structure of the paragraphs is also good.
You will still be marked down and lexical resource assessment. Try to include few more good words in there to increase your chances of getting a good score.
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Some people argue that the lifestyle offered by living in( Not required) the cities is better than living in( that of ) the countryside.
Correct : Some people argue that the lifestyle offered by the cities is better than that of the countryside.
I( In) my opinion, I completely agree with them for many reasons that I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, urban areas have all the public facilities that serves their population efficiently. For example, high quality ( reputed / well established ) schools and hospitals can be easily accessed by the students and patients, respectively. Also, main airports and governmental institutions are located in these areas. Another point is that there are many job opportunities available in town since all the huge corporates have their main branches in such districts. For instance, the teachers, doctors and engineers can easily apply to multiple company( companies) at the same time to increase their chance(chances) of securing the job they need while staying at( in) the same region and don’t have to leave their families for another sector.
Another way of writing the above sentence – For instance, teachers , doctors and engineers can easily procure employment in their hometown owing to the presence of several corporates in their own city without having to move to other places leaving their families.
On the other hand, rural areas don’t have a diverse number of institutions that provide public services to their society. To illustrate, while having the essential organisations present such as hospitals and schools, they don’t provide as many services as the ones in the municipalities.
Another way of writing the above sentence: This can be evidenced by the fact that despite the presence of essential facilities like hospitals and schools, the services provided are less & inferior than those provided in the municipalities.
Moreover, because there are less companies in the landscape, there are fewer chances for job seekers to be enrolled at or to advance in their careers. An example for that is engineers, they can’t utilize as many resources in such places because either they are not available or not suitable for the farmlands.
Another way of writing- This can be proven by the fact that professionals are deprived of resources in such places either due to its non- availability or unsuitability for their career growth.
In conclusion, living in a city provides many services and facilities for the people while enjoying an amazing lifestyle at a hectic pace.
Another way of writing – In conclusion , a city life provides better services and facilities along with enjoyment and an amazing lifestyle .
Pls see the corrections made above. The corrections are in bold.
Remarks – Well-attempted, well structured with a fair use of cohesive devices. Need to improve upon sentence construction and little bit in Grammar. Do need a slight improvement in vocabulary too.
Task Completion – Good
Coherence and Cohesion – Fair
Lexical Usage- Fair
Grammatical Range and Accuracy – Needs improvement
Band Score- 3.5 / 6
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Hi Falak,
Sorry for the delay!
Please find the essay attachment. Thank you!
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Feedback : Be careful with ” Subject- verb agreement”. Concessions statements could be better and more relevant. Stick to formal words. Need to work on lexical resources. Approach is good.
Band : 3/6
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A popular belief that prevails in society is that benefits of living in a countryside are inestimable in comparison to living in a city and its suburbs, however in my opinion, this notion is flawed and there is no alternative to the perks you rejoice in modern city life.
On the one hand, the countryside not only keeps you away from the hustle and bustle of city life but also fosters your spirit with the stupendous landscapes and picturesque green surroundings. In addition, it offers you fresh food, abundance of oxygen and a lucid lifestyle, which can make you tranquil. If people spend more time in the countryside, they will stay healthy and thus, will live longer. Evidence is provided by the doctors, when they express their observations that in principal, people who have spent their youth in a green environment have lived better quality life, free from health ailments.
On the contrary, affluent city life blesses you with ample opportunities such as path breaking technology, which you can employ in order to manage your daily chores at ease and hence, can spend more time on your hobbies and passions. In addition, you are equipped with state-of-art infrastructure and entitled to requisite health facilities. A good illustration of this is, phycologists attest, people living in city life are happier because they are content with the balance of lifestyle and intellectual challenges.
To summarise, although there are of benefits of living in the countryside, yet the advantages and amenities engrossed in city life are unparalleled and also essential in today’s life.
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Dear Vaibhav
The essay has been beautifully structured and organised but unfortunately you have gone principally wrong.
In agree /disagree essays it is always better to take a strong stand in the beginning itself which you have taken saying that you disagree with it. But in Body Paragraph -1 you have given strong points in favour of the same. If you have disagreed then your body paragraphs should be writing reasons in support of disagreement and not agreement.
If you wanted to partially agree with the given statement then you could have mentioned a concession statement in the introductory paragraph with reason.
You can show the other side of the argument in concession statements, but these should be done only in one or two sentences.
Thesis statement could have been added which clears the direction of the essay in the beginning only.
WHAT IS A THESIS STATEMENT?
A thesis statement is a sentence in the introduction which…
tells the reader your opinion
about the subject of the question.
may also give the reader
information about the organization of the essay.
is the final sentence of the
introduction.We cannot agree and disagree with the same thing.
Strong one –sided essays generally score more . Partial essays don’t score more.
I would not give any feedback here as you have principally gone wrong. Pls write again keeping the above points in mind.
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The living in city life verses staying in countryside is always debatable question. Some part of our society thinks that country side living offers more benefits over the city life. In my opinion, advantages being staying in city outweigh the life in rural part of our country.
In today’s era, basic education, good health care system & employment opportunities are the basic necessities of human being & certainly, city offers significant opportunities for the betterment of our future compared to countryside. For a instance, city has number of schools and colleges where student can perceive their career in indefinite streams whereas in countryside, schooling is limited upto the secondary level so eventually students have to travel to cities for career advancement.
In addition to that, mortality rates of infants & elderly people is much higher in rural parts compared to the cities mainly due to the lack of good health care systems & hospitals. Sometimes, it would be difficult to extend medical help during the emergencies due to lack of infrastructure and poor communication. Recently, there was an incident in one of the village of Maharashtra state where number of people got buried because of landsliding & unfortunately, it was too difficult for government to provide aid to these residents because of inaccessible roads and non availability of other means of communication. This is not the case in cities as citizens can receive all kinds of supports from all emergency bodies within no span of time.
Hence to conclude on this discussion, urban lifestyle offers more life enhancement opportunities for citizens compared to countryside & same has been proven over the decades.
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The Living in city life verses staying in countryside is always (a) debatable question. Some part of our society thinks that country side living offers more benefits over the city life. In my opinion, advantages being (of) staying in city outweigh the life in rural part of our country.
In today’s era, basic education, good health care system & employment opportunities are the basic necessities of human being & certainly, city offers significant opportunities for the betterment of our future compared to countryside. For a instance, city has number of schools and colleges where student can perceive (pursue) their career in indefinite streams whereas in countryside, schooling is limited upto the secondary level so eventually students have to travel to cities for career advancement.
In addition to that, mortality rates of infants & elderly people is much higher in rural parts compared to the cities mainly due to the lack of good health care systems & hospitals. Sometimes, it would be difficult to extend medical help during the emergencies due to lack of infrastructure and poor communication. Recently, there was an incident in one of the village (villages)of Maharashtra state where number of people got buried because of landsliding (landslide) & unfortunately, it was too difficult for government to provide aid to these residents because of inaccessible roads and non availability of other means of communication. This is not the case in cities as citizens can receive all kinds of supports from all emergency bodies within no span of time.
Hence to conclude on this discussion, urban lifestyle offers more life enhancement opportunities for citizens compared to countryside & same has been proven over the decades.
Instructions & Observations
1. Corrections have been made in bold in the essay.
2. Mistakes using articles
3. Used vocabulary in the wrong context. Eg. Perceive has been used in place of pursue.
4. One of the + plural noun ( should be “one of the villages” )
5. Wrong collocation – within no span of time – within no time.
Feedback:
A good attempt . Organisation and structure are strong but sentence framing needs improvement. Uncommon lexical words have hardly been used. Task completion is good with required word limit but there are article, punctuation and subject –verb agreement mistakes. Collocation mistakes are also evident .
Score : 3.5/6
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There has been an endless debate that people living in the city have more perks in comparison with those living in the countryside. I strongly agree with this and can justify this with some facts and examples in the following paragraphs.
Undoubtedly, people living in the city enjoy the benefits of the latest development in various fields like schools, hospitals, coaching institutions and even in buying the daily essentials. For example, there are various apps that can deliver all the necessary items like groceries, vegetables etc at your doorsteps. In addition to this, hospitals in the city have all the latest medical equipment which are nowadays required in the diagnosis of diseases. There are coaching institutions for every competition exam and also massive job opportunities are present in the urban areas.
On the contrary, some of the rural areas do not even have senior secondary schools. Furthermore, people have to run out of their areas for some medical treatments as hospitals in their areas do not have the latest technologies. For example, daily we are hearing that many human beings in the countryside are dying because of the non-availability of hospital beds and oxygen cylinders during the spread of the COVID 19 pandemic. Also, the benefits like easy access to the airports and entertainments sources like shopping malls, cinema theatres, restaurants etc are missing in rural areas.
In conclusion, for majority kind of luxury, entertainment and latest advancements, countryside people have to rush out of their home place and urban people have easy access to these commodities. In my opinion, city life is more enjoyable than life in the countryside.
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There has been an endless debate that people living in the city have more perks in comparison with those living in the countryside. I strongly agree with this and can justify this with some facts and examples in the following paragraphs.
Undoubtedly, people living in the city enjoy the benefits of the latest development in various fields like schools, hospitals, coaching institutions and even in buying the daily essentials. For example, there are various apps that can deliver all the necessary items like groceries, vegetables etc (etc.)at your doorsteps. In addition to this, hospitals in the city have all the latest medical equipment which are nowadays required in the diagnosis of diseases. There are coaching institutions for every competition exam and also massive job opportunities are present in the urban areas.
On the contrary, some of the rural areas do not even have senior secondary schools. Furthermore, people have to run out of their areas for some medical treatments as hospitals in their areas do not have the latest technologies. For example, daily we are hearing ( we are hearing almost daily) that many human beings in the countryside are dying because of the non-availability of hospital beds and oxygen cylinders during the spread of the COVID 19 pandemic. Also, the benefits like easy access to the airports and entertainments (entertainment) sources like shopping malls, cinema theatres, restaurants etc(etc.) are missing in rural areas.
In conclusion, for majority kind of luxury, entertainment and latest advancements, countryside people have to rush out of their home place and urban people have easy access to these commodities. In my opinion, city life is more enjoyable than life in the countryside.
Instructions :
1. Please look for corrections in bold above.
2. Etc – Etc. ( correct)
Feedback:
Task response is satisfactory within word limits. Lexical resource is limited and can be further improved. Minor Grammar & punctuation errors which does not attract attention. Good use of cohesive devices like ‘furthermore’, in addition to, on the contrary etc.
Band Score : 4.5/6
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Most people think that urban life introduces more convenience as opposed to what rural life can possibly offer. It is completely agreed that residing in a metropolis is significantly advantageous while an inhabitant of a small town or a village might face serious drawbacks. This essay will examine firstly, what prospects cities might bring to individuals’ lives, secondly their positive effects on human psychology; followed by a well-reasoned conclusion.
Firstly, developed cities enable people to reach their dream jobs by offering various workplaces such as restaurants, business centers, and universities whereas rural life has limited job opportunities, meaning that a talented person who seeks to be a famous musician is unable to hone his skills in a small town where only farming or other basic occupations are available. In this sense, large cities create an environment for youth to pursue a career based on their aspirations and interests.
Furthermore, in sharp contrast to the popular idea that urban life is posing some risks in terms of mental health, it is undeniably true to vocalize that amusement facilities and rehabilitation centers in cities may lead to a better quality of life as compared to sparsely populated hometowns where bigotry and oppression are the fundamental parts of society. Most importantly, people who have mental and physical disorders can be treated thanks to hospitals and medical centers while small towns are deprived of healthcare services.
In conclusion, living in large cities might provide a better quality of life through endless career prospects and liberty which helps people find their pursuits according to their aspirations, unlike small communities which only impose their own norms. I completely agree that individuals should be motivated to reside in large cities.
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In this 21st century, technology and science have grown rapidly, and it makes life easy for human beings. It is argued that people get more benefits to live in the urban area instead of sub-urban. I completely agree with this statement. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss the reasons to live in the city with examples and also provide a logical conclusion.
First of all, the education is an essential requirement of the person, especially in this century it becomes mandatory to get higher education from the reputed university for the personal and professional growth, which they can get only from the metropolis where all these education sectors exist for the study, so it is the major reason for the migration. For instance, nowadays most of the companies have recruited those persons who earn a minimum bachelor’s degree, and lack of the facilities of college/university in the countryside, so students have to move to the city for the higher study.
On the other hand, these days folks have became more concise about their career, and they are ready to stay anywhere in the world for it. Most of the multinational and well-known companies situated in the metro city have provided a number of advantages with high salary packages and opportunities to work in the modern environment, which helps to boost the career of the employees, so humans attract to it and they move to the city. i.e., as per the evidence by the pole of BBC, there was 40% population relocated to the metro in 2022, and only 20% population is remaining in the village to do farming. In addition, locals reckon that they can live a high standard lifestyle in the Town so it leads to settling in the city with family.
To conclude, for higher education and getting exposure to a job, people are preferring to leave the countryside, even everybody want to make a secure life for the future which they can do in the town.
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