[Unknown Member]

[Shahbaz]

* ‘planning to build opposite our residential area’ (The use of ‘opposite’ in this way is very common in Indian English. But, I suspect that this usage might be nonstandard. I would have written ‘that you are planning to build right across our…’ . Please look up ‘how to use ‘opposite’ for locations. I believe it is usually ‘opposite to’ rather than just ‘opposite’.

* ‘lead to an exponential increase in’

* ‘offer superior facilities for its home dwellers’ sounds a bit unnatural. I would have just used ‘residents’ or ‘owners’

* ‘in more details’ (in more detail)

Score: 2.25/3 (Generally speaking, your letters have fewer errors compared to your Task 2 essays)

[Unknown Member]

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter regarding the new project that you are planning to start in Mayur Vihar, New Delhi.

My name is Mamta Gulia and I live in Mayur Vihar. One of my friends is working in your company as a site engineer. I got to know from him about your new assignment that you are planning to construct new houses in that area.

Some areas around my society are vacant. So according to me, this is a good decision to build some buildings here. They provide a good environment or neighbourhood to our society as well. More facilities like shopping malls and hospitals might be available in the future because many individuals live there.

As you know, there are many companies near that site . As a result, some employees find that place a suitable option for living with family. I hope you provide them with some good services like parks, swimming pools, kids play areas and many more.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Mamta Gulia

[Shahbaz]

* ‘about your new assignment that you are planning to construct new houses in that area.’ (I feel that a comma should have come after the first ‘that’ )

* ‘ my society’ (In Indian English, it is very common to use ‘society’ when we mean ‘housing society’ . This use of the word is not well-known outside of India. So, I would use ‘housing society’ to avoid any confusions)

* ‘living with family’ (their family)

Score : 2.25/3 ( The bullet points were well-developed. The language can be improved even further )

[Unknown Member]

@falak – Please review

Dear Manager,
This letter is with reference to the new construction site that’s being developed in Sriram Nagar. I am one of the residents that reside 0.2 miles from your construction site and I want to discuss a few things with relation to the construction plan.

Firstly, I would congratulate you on the inauguration of your new construction plan and I happened to go through the post that was published last Sunday in the local newspaper “Times India” where you have announced it. Even though the post was published on the bottom of Page 8, you guys made the post very attractive which caught my attention to read the details.

Most importantly, the building plan and the community structure were quite impressive in the publication which explains all the world-class amenities that you are planning to provide such as a swimming pool, fitness center, aerobics center, coffee shop, 24×7 security system. The water recycling system was so notable that made me write a letter to you to appreciate the effort of reusing the water.
However, I want to ensure that you have planned well on the sewage system because if the pipelines are not well built, then the water would flow towards the low-level areas. I am concerned about it as my house is built in that area around 10 years ago. Not only the sewage system but also I would like to know the number of floors that you’re planning to build because it was not mentioned in the article, as my parents are diabetic and sit outside my home to get the natural light as per doctor’s advice. If you are planning to construct a large apartment which is more than 5 floors that would be a problem for me and my family. Since there is some missing information that was posted last week. Please publish a new post in the newspaper next week with entire the details or please reply back to my letter.

I hope you can understand the concerns I have with regards to the large construction that’s happening very close to my residence.

Your’s faithfully,

Sam

[Falak]

you guys (too informal ) made the post very attractive

I hope you can understand the concerns I have with regards (regard ) to the large

a large apartment which is more than 5 floors that would be a problem for me and my family. (I would suggest to write by considering the concerns of your whole housing society)

Bullet points need to be discussed in distinct paragraphs

Band : 2/3

[Unknown Member]

Dear Mr. Manager,

I am writing this letter regarding the new project, that is proposed by your company in the area of Govindpuram Ghaziabad.

One of my friend , who is working in your company , has told me about your project, and I have also read about the same in the local News paper, named as “Dainik Jagran”.

Having known about your project , I am feeling very glad and hoping that, as this project is scheduled near by our neighboring land, and will bring many more development here.

There is one major area, which is still lying as untouched , that there is no playground , and due to which our children are often stay at home , so I want your company to develop a park for children as well. If require , our housing society is also ready to to contribute for this development. Please discuss the matter with in your company and come back with positive note.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully

Mohit Jain

Secretary , Atharv Housing Society.

[Shahbaz]

* ‘ regarding the new project, that is proposed by‘ (I am not sure why there had to be a comma after ‘project’. Please look up ‘when to use commas with relative clauses’)

* ‘One of my friend‘ (‘One of my’ and ‘one of the’ are always followed by plural nouns. It should be ‘one of my friends’)

• ”Having known about your project , I am feeling very glad and hoping that, as this project is scheduled near by our neighboring land, and will bring many more development here”

The clause structure of this sentence is very unusual. Please re-read it see if it needs to be rewritten.

• “children are often stay at home’

‘children often stay at home’

• If require , our housing society is also ready to to contribute

I think you meant to say ‘if required‘

Score: 2/3