[Unknown Member]

Dear friend,

Thank you for your time last weekend, it was so much fun and rejuvenating from the busy schedule. It would be great if we make some plans to explore the hills area and we spend some time together.

I am writing to inform you that I lost or left my watch at your house during our stay. About the watch, It’s a Titan wrist watch which is in black color. The wristwatch has an automatic stop-watch feature with a black and golden dial and a silver inscription at the back. That watch was very valuable to me as it was not only a gift from my grandfather.

Once you find the watch it would be great if you come to my place and return it. No worries If you are busy this week. I will be visiting an exhibition by next week which is nearby your place, so you can return at that time and would love to have a cup of coffee together at Barista.

If you require any further information, feel free to contact me.

Thank you in advance!

Dheeraj

[Falak]

That watch was very valuable to me as it was not (the only) only a gift from my grandfather.

Sentence structure can be improved.

Keep writing!!!

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[Thejas]

Dear Newton,

I hope you’re doing well. I want to thank you for having me there for weekend. I’m fascinated by the hospitality you’re family showed me on last weekend.

Few weeks before travelling to Manali, I went to Bangalore with my cousin. I bought a Sonata watch from the mall. As you know Bangalore is famous for electronic products therefore I bought watch to gift it to one of my friend.

Unfortunately, After returning from Manali, I’m not able to find my watch. The last thing I remember is keeping the watch inside your bag. The watch is from 2009 addition, golden colour with a black strap.

There is one of my friend who is currently travelling to Manali with his family. I can request him to collect it from you. I will share your address and contact details to him. I think without any hesitation you can pass the watch to him.

Lots of love.

Thejas C C

[Falak]

you’re (your) family – you’re is contraction of you are

Few weeks before travelling to Manali, I went to Bangalore with my cousin. I bought a Sonata watch from the mall. As you know Bangalore is famous for electronic products therefore I bought watch to gift it to one of my friend.

Unfortunately, After returning from Manali, I’m not able to find my watch. The last thing I remember is keeping the watch inside your bag. The watch is from 2009 addition, golden colour with a black strap. (these two paragraphs can come under bullet point regarding describe the watch and it can be rearranged as following

Unfortunately, After returning from Manali, I’m not able to find my watch. The last thing I remember is keeping the watch inside your bag. Few weeks before travelling to Manali, I went to Bangalore with my cousin. I bought a Sonata watch from the mall. The watch is from 2009 addition, golden colour with a black strap. . As you know Bangalore is famous for electronic products therefore I bought watch to gift it to one of my friend.)

There is one of my friend (friends)

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[Unknown Member]

Dear mount,

I hope you’re all fine . It was a pleasant meeting with you and your family members on last weekend. i am very delightful for all love and affection provided by all your family members.

yesterday when we are at dining room we had deep talks till late night . When i felt drowsy i kept my wrist watch on side by almirah before going to sleep. with out noticing it i left your house . The watch is an antique it was gifted to me by my uncle on occasion of my marriage ceremony . It has a golden bracelet with special features like digital timings, compass indicator along with this there was my name engraved at the back.

if you found it please restore it in a safe locker. I have to catch delhi flight next week so i may visit your house as it is near by airport. you can feel free to call me or deliver a voice message

your friend

Ohmkar

[Falak]

mount, (Mount) – proper noun

i (I) am very delightful for all love and affection provided by (you all) all your family members.- just to avoid the repetitive usage of “family members”

yesterday (Yesterday) when we (were) are at dining room

with out (without) noticing it i (I) left (at) your house

The watch is an antique (,) it was gifted to me by my uncle

I have to catch delhi (Delhi) flight next week- proper noun

If you found (find) it, please restore it in a safe locker

“I” should be in capital letter throughout.

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[Unknown Member]

Dear Priya,

I hope this letter finds you and your family well. Today, I am writing to thank you for the wonderful stay I had at your place. Your hospitality filled my heart with joy. I felt as if I was at my own house.

Unfortunately, I left my watch at your home. It’s a MK watch and has round dial with golden chain strap. It was a gift from my husband and it is very precious to me.

If I remember it correctly, I left the watch near the dressing table. When I went to take shower, I removed my watch and placed it on the dressing table near the bathroom. If you find it, kindly keep it safely with you. I will be coming to your city for a meeting on 3^rd March. Then I shall pick it up from you.

Kind Regards,

Riza.

[Falak]

answer is under length , try to support bullet points with more explanation and extending details.

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[Unknown Member]

Hello Charu,

I hope you are doing great. Firstly, I like would like to thank you for a wonderful time last week. I enjoyed staying at your place and spending quality time with you and your family.

Secondly I like to inform you, after reaching home when I unpacked my items, I noticed I lost my watch. I vividly remember I removed my watch from my wrist after the tennis match with your brother in the garden. It will be great if you can look for my watch in the garden or your home. It is an apple watch. It has black color with a white dial. It has a square shape. Watch dial has roman numbers. This watch is very close to my heart because it is a gift from my dad on my 16th birthday.

If you can find my watch successfully. Please send the courier to the following address, house number 509, sector 20/C, Chandigarh, Pincode: 10020. Please don’t worry about the courier charges. I will transfer money to your account.

Once again I like to say, I had a memorable week with you and love to do the same again.

Your loveable
Deepti

[Falak]

Secondly (,) I like to inform you,

I could observe the use of multiple short sentences, basically simple sentence structure has been used. Need to work on compound and complex sentences.

Keep writing!!

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[Unknown Member]

Dear Vikram,

Hope you are doing well and I too reached home safely after I left your place last week.

First, I would like to thank you from the bottom of my heart for hosting me last week. It was an enthralling experience. We could recall all our old memories and, also had a wonderful time visiting the city with some lovely cuisine in the downtown.

One important aspect that I would like to bring to your notice is, that I lost my watch at your place. It wasn’t there on my wriest when I reached home. It was a Sieko A485 model with black belt. It also displays day and date on the right.

I believe I had left the watch near the dressing table. If you find it, then kindly do me a favor by couriering it by a normal post as they will charge a bomb through speed post. Since I am used to wearing this watch at all times, It is becoming it bit difficult without it.

Thank you again for your cooperation and needy help.

Yours Lovingly,

Omer

Wordcount: 180

[Falak]

Well-written.

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[prashanth]

Hi John,

I had a wonderful weekend last week at your home. Though I visited your house couple of times, your parents were very warmth and welcoming, and the special dishes made by your mother were mouth-watering. Especially, on Sunday the road trip from Manali to Ladakh is so refreshing that made my day. I knew saying thanks would be formal, but it is memorable weekend for me.

I forgot to tell you I lost my watch in your home. I thought of informing you, yet we were busy scheduling our travel and after reaching there I was completely obsessed with sightseeing. Since my grandfather gifted me that watch it is very close to my heart, it is one of the rare collections.

I believe your father mistakenly took my watch because both were of same brand and look very much similar. When he returns home discuss with him and send the watch through courier. Well, let me finish here. I am waiting for your reply

Best regards,

Prashanth.

[Falak]

were very warmth (warm)

road trip from Manali to Ladakh is (was) so refreshing that made my day

I was completely obsessed with sightseeing (we enjoyed)

add few details about watch too (second bullet point)

When he returns home discuss with him and ( please) send the watch through courier.

[Manga prasad]

Dear sir,

This is regarding my watch which I have lost yesterday night.

Since yesterday was holiday, I happened to visit museum along with my children and my parents.

we entered the museum at 5.00 PM on 22/03/22. The reason i was particular about the time, while entering the museum we were asked to enter the timing and I looked at my watch and entered the exact time. we had spent 3 hours in the museum and we enjoyed it a lot.

We also visited canteen in the museum and had snacks and Tea.

We were asked to leave the museum at 8.00 PM by the security guards. At that point of time, I realized that I had lost the watch. As there was huge crowd , we were asked to leave, I did not have the option of searching the watch. When enquired at the reception, they said that they may not able to find it immediately and requested to write a letter.

As the watch is very expensive and gifted by parents, I consider it as most special.

I sincerely request you to search for the watch and in case if you find it, please handover it to me.

The watch name is Rolex 5515 and blue in colour and has leather wrist.

In case if you wish me to file a police complaint, I will be happy to do that.

If you need any further information with regards to the same, you may call me on the number below please.

Thanks in Advance.

Prasad

9717171717

[Unknown Member]

Dear Ravi

I would like to express my gratitude for my stay at your home at last weekend. I had pleasant time over there and thank you for your great hospitality. we enjoyed lot and you took us to the market where we had purchased lot of stuffs. Hope you recall I bought a Rolex wrist watch from there, which was having the black strap and also have round shaped dial. I was very excited to got it at discounted price .

Unfortunately, I could not find it in my luggage when I got back to home . I remember keeping it in your living room probably on the table . It would be so nice if you take some burden to send it to my address.

Luckily , one of my colleagues is also travelling from your place this weekend . I can request him to collect from your house. I will pass your contact number and address to him . I hope you can hand it over to him .

I hope to see you soon.

Best wishes,

Parveen

[Sherry]

Dear James,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I have lost my watch at your place when I came there at last night.

Thanks, James, for the amazing treat which you have provided. It was a wonderful time to spent with you, thanks buddy for the delicious pasta which you had prepared. Had a good time in playing video games together. We should often do such kinds of meetups in a while.

James if you find my watch there, could you please keep it safe. Could you please bring it when me meet at school tomorrow?

It’s my pleasure if you can bring my watch tomorrow when we catch up at school. Sorry for the trouble.

Yours Faithfully,

Ms. Green.

[Falak]

Opening statement is not establishing the fact that it is an informal letter

I came there at (avoid “at”) last night.

second bullet point was on “Describe the watch”, hence answer has not been fully developed.

Yours Faithfully, (this is not a forma letter); lots of love would work

Try to extend ideas in order to make answer ,a fully developed one.

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[Gurwinder]

Dear Kamal,

I hope you are doing well! Firstly, I would like to thank you for a wonderful time spent last week. I had enjoyed a lot during my stay at your home and spent quality time with you and your family.

Secondly, I would like to inform you that I lost my watch during my stay at your home. It would be lost during playing a badminton with your brother in your garden. It is a Titan brand wrist watch having brown color. The watch having round golden dial with date and day feature display. This watch is very valuable to me because it was gifted by my grandparents on the occasion of my 20th birthday. I wear this watch on occasionally.

I requesting to you please search for my watch when even you got time, it would be a great help if you return to me on next week. I will be traveling to your city on next week to attend official meeting, will collect my watch from you.

Thank you in advance!

Gurwinder Singh

[Falak]

It would be lost during playing a badminton with your brother in your garden ( I might had lost it during a badminton match…)

I wear this watch on (avoid writing “on”) occasionally.

when even (whenever) you got (get) time,

I will be traveling to your city on “avoid “on”) next week to attend official meeting

Make use of prepositions very carefully.

I (am) requesting (you to please) to you please search for

Need to work on sentence structure and make use of cohesive devices.

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[Swarnika]

Dear John,

Hope you’re doing well.

Firstly, I’d like to thank you for a wonderful weekend we spent at your place. It has refreshed all great memories we had together, especially the way we used to do the sleepover in college times, and used to share all our thoughts with each other.

One important thing I want to bring to your notice is that while my stay at your place I lost my watch. I believe I might have left it in a bathing area while taking a bath. It was apple Series 3 watch with white strap and a silver aluminium case.

It would be really great if you can do me a favor, and please send it by a speed post at my address as it’s a gift from my father and it has emotional value. Also, please do let me know the cost of the courier, so that I will be able to transfer the amount in your account.

Once again, thank you for the time spent on weekend, you made my weekend memorable.

Yours Lovingly,

Swarnika

[Falak]

well-written!!

Keep writing!!

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[Manga prasad]

Dear Friend,

I hope you are doing well and my best wishes for your new job.

I would like to thank you for inviting me to your house and arranging a great feast. I have enjoyed the food thoroughly and the hospitality shown by your mother immensely. In spite of she not being well, she prepared mouth-watering and exotic dishes and she ensured that we have a blast.

Further , I would like to let you know that I forgot my watch at your place. As soon as I boarded the bus, I realised that it was at your home. I generally do not place on the floor and I strongly believe it could be in one of the cupboard.

Its a blue coloured Rolex watch with the United States map on it. The watch has leather strap.

As you know the watch is gifted by my father, I have an emotional connection to it. If you find the watch, please do let me know , so that I will come and pick up the watch by myself as I can’t afford to lose it again.

Thanking you in Advance.

Prasad

[Falak]

it could be in one of the cupboard.(cupboards)

All the bullet points need to be explained with extended details and develop them fully and equally.

Keep writing!!

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