[Tauseef]

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I would be returning the book that I have borrowed from you.

I have borrowed the “Python- A complete Series” book from you before

my computer science semester 3 examination. The book is a pdf version

of the original copy.

The book explained the basic syntax of python programming language. It also

helped me to understand the data structure and algorithm. Since the book

covers all the basic topics, It clarify the concept of loop/condition.

Due to corona pandemic I have travelled to my hometown. Since It was complete

lockdown so the local police authorities not allowing us to come outside from

the house. I missed the deadline to return the book.

Once again, I apologies for any inconvenience.

Your Faithfully

Tauseef

[Falak]

I apologies (apologize)

Feedback : clearly, the response in under length , hence limited use of structures, phrases, vocabulary has been observed. Bullet points need bit more of explanation in order to fulfil the word count.

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[Sahil]

Dear Sir,

Greetings of the day!

I am writing to you with regards to the Data Discovery and Analysis book that I borrowed from you last week for my research. I would like to express my sincere apologies for not returning it on time and would like to visit your office tomorrow to return it.

I can not begin to express my gratitude to you for lending me the book. It definitely proved to be a great asset in completing my research work in time. I was able to navigate through it with great ease and the reference it provided was a tremendous help. The book had everything I was looking for in order to connect the dots for our annual research project.

I understand you were expecting me to return the book yesterday, however, due to unforeseen weather conditions I was not able to travel to the college. I would like to visit your office tomorrow. Before that, I wanted to check with you whether you will be available. If not, would it be okay for me to return it to your assistant?

Looking forward to hearing from you. Thanks again!

Yours faithfully,

Sahil

[Falak]

There is need to use wide range of structures, make use of cohesive devices in order to establish cohesion even better.

Keep writing!!

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[Unknown Member]

Dear Miss. Johnson,

I am writing this letter inform you that I have completed the course on Cyber Security and I would like to express my gratitude towards you lending me a book. However, I was not able to return the book on time but, I would like to return it now.

The handbook was a 5th Edition of fundamentals of cyber security written by Dr. Jack Reacher and Dr. Gregory Moody and it was a paperback edition published in 2019.

This edition helped me during the course as it clearly explained the basics of cyber attacks that happen in the world and clearly laid out the measures that can be adopted to secure ourselves from getting cyber attacked or being cyber bullied.

Since the exam of this course was the first, I was occupied in preparing for the other exams. Therefore, I was not able to return this book within the allotted time, as there was a lot to prepare for other courses as well.

Once again, I would like to apologize for any inconvenience caused.

Best wishes,

Abhay Bhatnagar

[Falak]

I am writing this letter (to) inform you that I have

express my gratitude towards you (for) lending me a book.

Proof -read is must in order to avoid minor slips.

keep writing!!

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[Kapil]

Dear Mr. John,

I am writing this letter to let you know that I would like to return the book which you provided me when it is most required.

The book name is ‘oracle enterprise system’ which is written by james bond, and it is just latest edition where they described about enterprise system in profound way which make easier to understand for the end users.

As you know, we had to submit the final thesis of the project to complete the course, and I took subject of manufacturing company for this study, so this book helped me to get idea of each module such as finance, purchase, planning, production and human resource because these are the mainly department who use the system. It assisted me to secure the first rank in this semester.

I got sick for 2 weeks and doctor instructed me to get rest at home so I couldn’t come to college to return your book. I apologize for inconvenience.

I look forward to get your response regarding your availability at the university.

Yours sincerely,

Abc

[Falak]

when it is (was) most required.

james bond (James Bond) – proper noun

profound way which make(s) easier

these are the mainly (main) department(s) who (which) use

Abc (Full name)

Make use of cohesive devices in order to maintain flow of expression.

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[Sugandha]

Dear Miss Jennifer

I am writing this letter to express my thanks and informing you about my inability to return the book you gave to me two months back naming ” Ultimate Guide to Business Economics”, though I already completed my MBA degree last month.

Admittedly, This book contained all the facts of business and economics which a student could think of, all the data is organized in a beautiful way.

I must say that book actually justified its name in true sense, it was really a helping hand during my exams, moreover I learned so much new facts which has really enhanced my knowledge , in addition each topic is explained in clear and concise manner that reader needs to put no extra effort to absorb what is being taught.

While taking book, I know I promised to return it within a month because it is the most demanding book that you already told me but unfortunately due to some unforeseen circumstances at home , I went out of town with my mother for a month, I really want to apologize for the inconvenience I might have caused to you because of being late in returning.

I want to give book back now so please just let me know place and time as per your earliest convenience, so I might come.I look forward hearing from you.

Many Thanks

Sugandha Garg

[Falak]

First bullet point could be explained bit more.

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[Pratik]

Dear Sir/madam

I’m Writting This letter To you, for returning The comics book I borrowed, which I forgot to return on Time.

long time ago I took one comics book From Your Personal Bookshelf. The name of the book was ( The Batman Dark Night Rises) Which was black in Colour. It was one of the book I always wanted to put my eyes on, But I was not able to, until I found it in your bookshelf. I was super exicted To Put my hands on this book, And I love reading it And enjoyed A-lot. thanks To you

This Comics books was very gripping From The start. I loved All The Characters ,all through Bruse wayne Was My Favourite And the way his Part has fit in with his Personality, I was stunned. It was Really helpful For me To Known Such A person, Even Though he was rich and was born with golden spoon In his mouth, Still he helped a-lot Of peoples around him. which showcase that No matter How Big You are, Always Help The people. He helped people with Both side of his life, As a normal Human , And as a Crime Dectective Which Brings his Other side of Batman. This was a amazing Time for Me, Yet I’m not Fulfill With This Kind of books, But I’ll look For to Order New Series.

I Have been shifted to New location, Hence its not Possible For me To come and give this book to you in person, Yet i would Send You This Book by a Mail. Because It has been Long Time It was With me, And I hope It would be okay For You to accept It. I do believe You stay At the same address, And It has been A long Time I haven’t Came To visit, So I’ll Even Like To take a Appiontment For my Vist During My week-off Which would be On 9th of June, And I would Like To Gift You Some New Volume.

I Look Forward To See you.

Yours Sincerely,

Pratik

[Falak]

It was one of the book(s)

I love(d) reading it

-lot Of peoples (people) around him. (full stop is not required) which showcase(s) that No matter

repetitive usage of words like “people”

I haven’t Came (come) – V3 will be used

So I’ll (would) Even Like To take a (an) Appiontment (appointment) For my

Dear Sir/madam (Dear Ms. Ruth) , since your closure is ” Yours sincerely)

Need to work on sentence structure, as almost all are starting with monotonous usage of “I would,….)

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[Falak]

Word count should be minimum 150 words , try to write 150+ words. Do add bit more explanation in order to develop your answer completely

journal – it may not be the right word to use for a book

I look forward to see you soon. – inappropriate tone for this letter.

Keep writing!!

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