[Shubhangi]

International Aid play a major role in globlization, it build strong connection between countries. Nowaday, every country is finding useful resources for their econimic growth. The government of these countries use this resources for earning money in order to make progress and provide international aid to the needy country. But some individuals believe that their nation’s government should not spend on international aid . I disagree with the statement and will provide credible reasons to prove.

Firstly , i think that providing international aid is type of charity too , it will help the country itself becouse this can strengthen their relationship , with other nations and will open a door to many opportunities. When richest country provides health and education to the poor country automatically this will create more jobs and recruite people within a country which solve problem of unemployment from their nation. Morover, working with such country will passes good quality of knowledge from diffrerent field and creat many opportunities in different sector. Further open more sectors and setting up industies in various nations will turn out to be in profitable fot the nations.

Where as, sending help in natural calamities like earthquake, floods, etc. Are uncontrolable calamities in such situations providing assistance means humanity. Every country should have seperate foreing aid account for the sake of humanity. This can help the suffered nations recovered fast. In return developed countriey can have some share of their resources which can give profits to them , for example USA owned some share from poor country and china also owned some lands in return. This types of terms and condition will benifit both the lands . by the period of time poor countries will pay their debt and have their resources back.

In a nutshell, it creat helthy environment in the world , in such crises developed countries show their responsibility towords poor countries, in return we could save many lives of citizens in dangerous contditions.

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[DEVENDIRAN]

Nowadays, Countries spend more money on International Aid, Since these contributions helps countries to strengthen their relationship with other countries, but some people believe government should not spend money in funding other nations, while there exist major unresolved problems in their own land such as unemployment, homelessness, poverty and other basic needs which can be mitigate using g the money spend on International Aid. I believe its absolutely necessary for a Nation to support the subordinate countries by funding them via International aid, In order to establish friendly relationships with them.In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss why it is important to provide Monetary aid to other nation.

To begin with, generally International Aid’s are provided to other countries which are currently facing issue due to some natural calamities, catastrophe, inflation etc.These funds support the people’s of the nation to over come the struggle, also helps the government to strengthen their economy, and support them to contribute again to the global development.These funding actually develops friendly relationship with the other countries and also improves the privilege of the nations since it is contributing to the Global welfare. For Example, Countries which supported other countries by providing will be recognised by people all over the world and that improves the Nations business relationship and trading with other countries.

More over, It has a mutual benefit of getting such aids from the other countries too while our Nation is facing financial issues. More over, It also improves countries economic privilege and social status of the countries which helps in future joint ventures or creating some beneficial business by collaborating with other nations.However, some people might feel these can be invested in the growth of their own nation, but the benefits of international funding are noteworthy.For Example, Many countries got International aid from developed counties during the recent COVID-19 outbreak, which helps them to rebuild their economy that has been heavily damaged due to the pandemic

To summaries, Investment on International aid helps the countries with mutual benefits, It helps both country to prosper financially via trading and joint ventures and also contributes to healthy relationship with the neighbouring countries.

[Manprit]

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[Koppolu Preethi]

International aid is a transfer of goods or services from one country to another. Most of the people think that Country should not spend money on International aid, because there are homelessness and disadvantaged people in their own country but I ,absolutely believe that every government must help other countries who are in need of resources due to their poor economical status or whatsoever reasons. In upcoming paragraphs I shall explain why countries should help or spend money on International aid.

To begin with ,International aid can bring a numerous benefits. Nowadays many countries like United States and India are spending more money on this. It is because every country will have some difficult moments , like affected due to natural disasters, war or extremely serious accidents. These problems will cost a numerous amount of loss like resources shortage or money which may be not affordable. If we help them with the required resources and money, the country would break through the hard times and can sustain back.

International aid not only contributes on resources, money and food , it also provide military/army assistance during war or serious accidents caused by natural disasters.

Further ,the receiving country will remember the kind of support they got and in turn, they will maintain good relation ship and provides assistance during hard times.This will enhances country-to-country relationships, economic standards between them.Although there are some homeless and unemployed who need money or support by local government ,we still should carry out international aid because it can contribute to the improvement of local economy in trade marketing and thus improving our country’s economy. When economy become better and better, there would be more job opportunities to offer to the local people, therefore, the unemployed would in turn gain a job and the homelessness would vanish one day.

To sum up, I believe that all countries should help by providing international aid after looking at numerous benefits even if they themselves have difficulties with unemployment and homelessness.

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[Kapil]

In today’s world, it is responsibility of nation to help others in crucial situation. It is considered by some people; they should avoid financial support to others because firstly they should spend on their own society to solve the problem of workforce and streeties which are the major issue for the country. Both are directly impact on the economy. I completely agree with this statement. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss in details with examples.

Nowadays, due to huge number of populations and lack of job vacancies, it becomes difficult to survive for many. Firstly, they could not afford the higher education for their children. Secondly, because of the absence of the work sometime individual feel depress and they get addicted with some bad habits, thereby, they make crime and the rate of violation is getting increase. It is liability of authority to create opening in the market. i.e., Presently the economy of Sri Lanka has touched to down in compare to past and majority don’t have enough amount to buy groceries because government could not create new vacancies for the local people.

Home is essential part of the human for living with their family, but today a plethora of people have to sleep on street due to the lack of space in the city. So, ministry should launch project of home for the poor.

There are many examples of developed countries who helped to under developed nation but doesn’t get positive result. For example, United states had provided financial support to Afghanistan for 20 years, but because of corruption the money only reach to the politician. Civilization don’t get any benefits so their situation didn’t improve.

To conclude, government should focus to resolve the problems of their own citizen instead of aid to others because in the critical situation developing country might not offer any help.