[Nitish]

In the Morden era, with the advancement of global economy money circulation has been improved in the society. Few believes that spending too much on birthdays and weddings is justified, while others argue about the unnecessity of huge expenditure on one time occasion. This essay will discuss the reason and possible solutions of this matter.

To begin with, spending on marriages and birthdays have become status symbol for few individuals. They consider this occasion as an opportunity to show-off their rich lifestyle. However, a recent survey depicts that almost 60% families in India take debt or loan to organize huge celebrations parties and result of that it creates the financial instability for them. Still, it is becoming trend thought-out the society and it is all due to social pressure.

To tackle this situation, we should start awareness campaign about financial literacy and some TV advertisements to teach how we can celebrate this occasion without spending too much money. For instance, Newzeland government runs financial education classes at community level and run TV programs to given less expensive ideas to celebrate marriages and birth anniversary, even they book pre-designed public places to cut down the costs, which decrease the cost of event significantly. So, government support and financially literacy play a vital role.

To conclude, although few individuals spend a lot of money on weddings and birthdays due to social pressure and to show-off. But it should be done based on individual’s financial capability, moreover government should educate the people to spend wisely through campaign and financial literacy programs.

[Unknown Member]

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Task response-6.5

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Overall-6.5

[Shubhum]

In this modern world, wasting of money is becoming a major issue for the common people, especially in birthday parties and weddings. It is believed that in these days excessive money were wasted on weddings as well as in birthday parties. This essay will portray about impact of budget by wasting of excessive money in an event or functions.

to embark upon, wasting excessive money on weddings and birthday parties have become common for several people. They consider this occasion as a chance to show of their luxury lifestyle. however in a reports said that 15-20 percent rich families waste their money like water. In addition, if we think about middle class families they have to carry their budget them. Hence, these days spending on celebration is a current trend.

To tackle this condition, we have to make a proper budget to deal with our expenses. Although, if we spend our money in necessities in the place of waste material, then we can control our budget as well as it may help on savings for our child. In other words, common people who came froe middle class family they have to spend their money wisely.

In conclusion, it is clear that several people invest their lot of money on weddings and birthday parties for their child happiness that if in future they should not be regret for nothing should be missing.

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Overall band- 5.5