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AdministratorMay 27, 2021 at 12:29 PM1350 Network PointsActivity Points 5960
You made a great stride in this task Rahul!! But we need to work with you to improve your score.
In my opinion tourism benefit (benefits of tourism) are more than its (negative+) consequences
(comma is required here) the foremost development that Tourism bought (brought)
they will (no ‘will’) buy
due to which native people will (no ‘will’) get the job of tourist guide
unemployment as more the (no article) tourism will result in higher the(no article) opportunities
Moving to (negative) consequences which tourism has provided (inflicted)
at (around) the monuments or (on) roads
There are a lot more errors…….but these are not to be worried about, but taken as a constructive criticism. Talk to your trainer about your grammar skills.
- Try to improve your grammar skills.
- If you are not sure that the sentence is absolutely correct, DON’T make it. Errors will result in more negatives than the positives of complex sentence framing
- You tried to include some good words, but the usage was a little off.
- Repetition of the liking devices