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Feedback: The answer has an appropriate introduction which the candidate has attempted to express in his own words. There is good coverage of the data and a brief reference to contrasting trends. The answer can be followed although it is rather repetitive and cohesive devices are overused. In order to gain a higher mark for content, Sentences are long but lack complexity. There are some errors in tense, verb
form and spelling which interfere slightly with the flow of the answer.Band 6
