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  • Anureet

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    July 19, 2021 at 9:33 AM

    BP 1- Rephrase this line with however

    BP 2- stay away- incorrect collocation- write: refrain from committing more crimes

    prevent them taking- prevent them from taking

    towards crime- not required

    use synonyms of committing crimes where possible

    Conclusion- while coming out- substitute once they have served their punishment

    eventually, be decreased- eventually decrease

    Note: You have done a good job but this essay requires a little bit of fine tuning

    Band Score- 4/6

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