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Introduction: Don’t include question statement in intro instead write a thesis statement stating the main points

BP 2: one of the most important disadvantage- disadvantages- always include a plural term after one of the

replacements to- of

one of the longest history- rephrase this line

loses their meaning- will result in a loss of their meaning

BAND SCORE: 4.5/6 KEEP WORKING!