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Introduction: many-some
qualification- degree
a better- better
soft skills are- is
in the job- for the job
BP 1: better- redundantly used
majority- a majority
the one’s degree- one’s degree
doctor or teachers- doctors
For more clarity- unnecessary
MBBS- an
BP 2: better- lucrative
result into- results
trained- a trained
For instance- already used in BP 1- substitute take for example
major- required
BP 3: communications- communication
Conclusion: will always- can professionally boost- rephrase our career
BAND SCORE: 4.5/6 Good work. Keep writing!
