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Introduction- believed- believe
Paraphrase clearly
Valuable- important
BP 1: help- can help in
Easier- easily
show- shows
significant- significance
Are required- is required
performing- perform
courses- companies
Equip- incorrect word choice
Prospectice- prospective
Persuasive- persuasion
can take you to the position- can help one in becoming a leader
Working- work
Conclusion- summarise main points more clearly
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