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INTRODUCTION: number growth- growth
obese- obesity
pleople- people
lead- led
would strained- would get strained
a important- an important
Although- erroneous complex sentence
work on paraphrasing and thesis statement
BP 1: have been- have
become- became
especially those- especially for
BP 2: start- started
habbit- habit
and it is a habit- when it becomes a habit
reduces- it reduces
put- manage
Reducing the higher calories of food- lowering the intake of calories
exercise help- exercise can help
exercise- exercising
Conclusion: changing- change
in to overweight- to become overweight
activities on daily- activity on a daily
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