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INTRODUCTION: It is argues- rephrase it
finest- most effective
BP 1: introduced- taught
teaches- teach
long life morals- life long moral values
physical confidence- body positivity
chronic and severe- write either chronic or severe
in the adulthood- in adulthood
BP 2: stress- strain or pressure
higher- the higher
correlative comparative is correct- GOOD
Conclusion- more of exercise- focus on exerise
BAND SCORE: 4/6. Good. Keep writing!
