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  • Anureet

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    July 28, 2021 at 11:34 AM
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    INTRODUCTION: paraphrase the question statement

    without deep- without having deep

    which brings- which can bring

    BP1: lot of- a lot of

    higher the, the higher the social

    enjoys- enjoy

    BP2: Contributes- can contribute towards

    something- someone

    CONCLUSION: offcourse- ofcourse- informal instead use surely, definitely or indeed

    shorter- a short

    if judiciously- if he judiciously spends his money

    capital is used in business

    BAND SCORE: 4.5/6 Good. Keep writing!