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  • Anureet

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    July 30, 2021 at 8:30 AM
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    INTRODUCTION: some people including me- first paraphrase the question statement then state your opinion in a thesis statement along with the main points which you are going to elaborate on in the subsequent paragraphs.

    BP1: kids- children- kids is informal

    younger days- formative years

    body exercise- exercise

    extra physical- physical- you are suggesting to include them in the curriculum. Hence, they are not extra

    BP2: child- the child

    motivate- can motivate

    include- includes

    lot of- a lot of

    fatness-obesity

    CONCLUSION: advantages- advantage

    scedules- schedule

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